Thread: The Dream (short story)

Originally Posted by gwahir

I didn't have time to absorb the narrative, but you're trying to be too wordy and it isn't working for you. Ostentatious sesquipedalianism doesn't work for anyone.

QFT. It's especially grating since your story is riddled with grammatical errors. Every 3rd "sentence" is actually a sentence fragment... Also, to be brutally honest, a lot of the big words you are using aren't even that impressive, except that they are being used in places where a much smaller word would work better and that they are also often not being used correctly.