Thread: Standup routine

I enjoyed it more as a story, but the ending was kind of cruel and doesn't fit your hapless style of comedy too much.

I really didn't know how to end it. You felt that it was cruel? Fair enough. I was aiming for more along the lines of "here is an excellent example of public fear being taken too far", hoping the joke was more on us, since we had did this terrible thing. Regardless, it still needs work.

Story humour is the kind I think that I prefer. I don't like one liners, so a story held together with a series of jokes and humour work best for me, that was what I was hoping at least to construct with these 2 pieces. They probably need a few more jokes inserted, I have already came up with one or two improvements, but I am still unsure about how to form a proper, laugh out loud ending. I was hoping the ending of the paedophile one would get a laugh, at the stupidity of it all, but I can see how it could leave a rather sour taste.