I don't like my narrators to sound omniscient, though. I'm sorry it sounds stupid, but I like the mix.

This was just a tiny little story that I didn't edit in the least, that I just wrote in about ten minutes. It's not meant to be thought out, motivations are not meant to be explained - it's kind of the point, the convention defying. The narrator stumbling around trying to find the word for 'blind-cord', the gun not going off, there being no real deeper meaning to the proceedings. It's about a guy who wrote down some rules a hundred years ago that people took as gospel, and defying them for the sake of amusement.

I'm finding more and more that this forum tends to be hypercritical over anything else. Most of these errors I realize after re-reading it, but I can't be assed to go back and fix them because at the end of the day, posting it on this forum generally ruins any shot the story has at publication.

I feel a slight air of condescension when I post my work, and it's not for nothing. I do like criticism, but I tend to think people underestimate my ability or self awareness when it comes to writing.