Thread: Cannon on my initials

because things spiralled so much in the two points I mentioned. I mean, a couple dissonant harmonies works to provide strength for later ones, but you didn't build up to any real resolution by the time those kicked in, just into another awkward passage.

I'm not saying there isn't progression - the tune noodles along nicely enough, but... where? why?

it's really those two points that hurt it the most, and not being able to resolve the song. I understand the atonality, and i'm not against most of what's been done there, it just feels really sloppy and poorly thought out at those points

Originally Posted by sycld

It's odd you say that when before you said it sounded like the notes were chosen at random.

you told me they weren't. i chose to take that at face value.

Originally Posted by sycld

But I think what I have trouble doing the most is continuing with something to its end. I personally think the real problem here is that the progression after the sticky dissonant passage at 17s is just suddenly cut off rather than developed further before the next exposition where all the voices are silenced except one.

And maybe that is because I painted myself into a corner. But I think I could return the voices to something a more harmonious.

this is what i was saying before, though, you had a nice enough little buildup, but then it just sputtered and flopped around instead of resolving and moving on to the next part. altering the line (I'm assuming again that you just wrapped the same line three times on itself) so that it fits in terms of harmony can alter the theme enough to resolve it to something else, which would give you fresh ground to play with.

simonj: never did. when did you graduate from clown college?