A poem about my dream

**TheOriginalGrumpySpy** · 09-30-2008, 02:41 PM

It's evident you rhymed for the sake of rhyming. Especially to take the AA BB approach.

If I may opine, poetry, to me, is more than word on a page; it's about meter.

Also thank you sycld for trusting I could do better than A Fight of Heart

**jared** · 09-30-2008, 02:46 PM

Originally Posted by TheOriginalGrumpySpy

It's evident you rhymed for the sake of rhyming. Especially to take the AA BB approach.

If I may opine, poetry, to me, is more than word on a page; it's about meter.

Also thank you sycld for trusting I could do better than A Fight of Heart

Didn't mean to pin you like that but I'm not as familiar with people here as I once was

**sycld** · 09-30-2008, 03:18 PM

Originally Posted by TheOriginalGrumpySpy

If I may opine, poetry, to me, is more than word on a page; it's about meter.

If the Internet has taught me anything (including the OP's poem as an example), it's that poetry is "a series of couplets written with a 5th grade vocabulary."

Alexander Pope would have responded to the OP's poem with this parody critiquing predictable couplet rhyming schemes:

Originally Posted by Teh Pope lolnoAlexander

Where-e'er you find "the cooling western breeze,"
In the next line, it "whispers through the trees;"
If crystal streams "with pleasing murmurs creep,"
The readers threatened (not in vain) with "sleep."

PS WHAI WUZ TEH MUSE'S PLAYING SO DEAR