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    Default A few of my poems

    I wrote these a long, long time ago, but I figured I would get this forums' ball rolling. One of these poems is actually published in North America and Western Europe. can you guess which one?


    Day Dream
    I day dreamed of a love today
    A love that seemed so far away
    Not hard to see how that could be
    Why would such perfection settle on me?

    If I could pluck from earthly vine
    One with whom I could share love divine
    Is there just one, or are there two?
    I don't know just what quite to do.

    Such things as this, why do I ponder?
    It is a thing I often wonder
    What chance has a noble soul
    Against handsome parts and a rotten whole?

    Not much of one it would appear
    I'm doomed the fate which I most fear
    Beatiful soul and love in your heart
    In the world of the flesh just doesn't go far.


    Alone

    Away from my home, gone from what I know
    No longer near those people and places
    My happiness stained, underlying sorrow
    While longing for love and tender embraces

    Feigning smiles, accepting this home
    And feeling the pain as I stay alone


    Alone Again
    So long life was at perfection
    So long had my life been driven
    Now things are spinning in every direction
    And I've lost what God had given

    Alone again, heart full of pain
    Never wanted to be like this again
    The hole which was full so long
    Is larger now because we didn't belong

    Didn't belong together; so long past but still the pain
    I don't want to be alone again


    Is it so?

    The world is around me
    within me, without me
    could I have been left behind?
    How can something so beautiful be contained
    in someone as ugly as me
    The world is around me
    within me, without me
    but is it within me?
    is it so?

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    I'm guessing it's the last one, because I couldn't even see the first two being published anywhere.


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    Mr. E, you have been hurt deeply in the past haven't you?

    Also, I'm guessing the last one was probably published. (Second guess would be Alone)
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    Mr E. is clearly a 14 year old goth girl and not the ripped black Adonis we have been led to believe. I'm going to guess it's the second one. It better not be the first one.

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    You have a very deep and sorrowful introspection in your writing.
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    I didn't read it but I am sure it's amazing
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    I like your writing, it flows very well, and seemingly without any effort

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    You guys are pretty good at guessing, it is the last one that I've had published. The first one is actually the first poem I ever wrote, so that's why it is so elementary. Thanks for the compliments, those who complimented .

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    Last two are good.
    You got a pretty interesting style and most of your poems flow well.
    Though, some of the rhymes seem forced.

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