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    Default Poem fragment I wrote today

    The world is a pile of writs
    Holy ink stained parchments and paper;
    Piles collapse, floating leaves landing on Earth, angelic
    Delicate as petals
    Fragile as a thought, uncommitted to memory.


    I jotted it down in a few minutes. I'm less impressed by it on a second reading.


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    it doesnt rhyme

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    Whoa


    I totally missed that

    Also I forgot to make it emu


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    No but really it's driven by alliteration consonance and (lol)assonance.


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    did you mean:

    Fragile as a thought uncommitted to memory.

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    I dunno, maybe it's suppose to be ambiguous

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    Also the inclusion of the comma doesn't change the meaning, even if in prose you wouldn't include it. It's primarily meant to indicate a slight pause.


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    I wrote a poem that doesn't thyme the other week.
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    This post was quite an effort to make, I hope it wont get lost.

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    Quote Originally Posted by sycld View Post
    The world is a pile of writs
    Holy ink stained parchments and paper;
    Piles collapse, floating leaves landing on Earth, angelic
    Delicate as petals
    Fragile as a thought, uncommitted to memory.


    I jotted it down in a few minutes. I'm less impressed by it on a second reading.
    best poem i've ever read

    i loved the allusions to the battle of tennyson

    and alll the insightful and visceral metaphors, I'm simply gushing!!

    Where can I purchase a copy of this delightful piece?

    Please info me back ASAP!

    -- nick

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    I have a pile of them in my closet.

    Please come over and take one.


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