
- ok, so help
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You have a very nice writing style, but the last part is a little confusing to me, I read it a couple times but I'm still not quite sure what happened. Obviously the main character did something to upset Nemo, maybe Nemo thought that he was lying, but I just don't understand why Nemo attacked him, and the third part only confused me more.
It is very nice other than that, I enjoyed reading it. I don't have any suggestions for you but I wouldn't mind reading more of it in the future. Smaller paragraphs would be nice though
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